Patchwork Paraphrasing
I’m sure you’ve heard about paraphrasing. It’s fundamental
to academic writing; it’s better than quoting, because a paraphrase, created
with your own perceptions and language, is more closely connected to your ideas
than someone else’s writing could ever be. Some (including me) would argue that
paraphrasing is the bedrock of scholarly discourse. You’ve probably heard all
of this. However, even when students know the importance of paraphrasing, and
they try to paraphrase their sources rather than quoting them, they will sometimes
unintentionally create something between a quote and a paraphrase, a
half-measure that can weaken their writing: a patchwork paraphrase.
What is Patchwork Paraphrasing?
Writing instructors use the term patchwork for this kind of text because it has a pieced-together,
hodge-podge quality rather than the seamless integration of strong academic
writing. A patchwork paraphrase contains much of the same language or structure
as the source it refers to, so much so that it isn’t a unique product of its
author. You don’t want patchwork paraphrasing in your writing for a few reasons, the most important ones being (a)
it functions like a quote in your argument (which, as we know, isn’t as good as
a paraphrase) and (b) it could be interpreted as plagiarism.
Patchwork paraphrasing can be tricky to detect, because there’s no easy rule or telltale sign to help you determine whether your writing is patchwork. Instead, you’ll need to ask yourself this question as you write: is this phrasing truly my own creation?
Patchwork paraphrasing can be tricky to detect, because there’s no easy rule or telltale sign to help you determine whether your writing is patchwork. Instead, you’ll need to ask yourself this question as you write: is this phrasing truly my own creation?
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| Patchwork paraphrasing is sometimes referred to as "quilted text"-- writing that does not use the author's voice but is instead primarily made up of words and phrases from the original source or sources. |
Patchwork Examples
Let’s look at an example to get a better sense of how you
can answer this question. I pulled this passage from an article I found on
systems thinking in healthcare:
Health professionals will need to be able to set common goals and targets with patients, service users and relevant stakeholders, and ensure that each group or individual is properly informed and engaged. From a systems thinking perspective, increased participation provides the opportunity to break down barriers between patients and providers, and citizens and policy makers. Evidence and explicit knowledge need to be integrated with tacit knowledge of stakeholders within the working dynamic of the health team. (Swanson et al., 2012)
Here’s a patchwork paraphrase of the same passage:
Healthcare providers need to set
common goals for patients, service users, and stakeholders (Swanson et al.,
2012). Swanson et al. (2012) argued that more participation from all
stakeholders can break down barriers between patients and providers. Evidence
can be combined with tacit knowledge of all of the stakeholders on the team
(Swanson et al., 2012).
Notice that, technically, I’m not plagiarizing: I didn’t
reuse large chunks of the passage word-for-word, and I included citations
whenever I mentioned an idea from my source. However, in these sentences I used
virtually the same structure as the original passage and didn’t provide my
unique understanding of the topic. Compare this sentence from the original
From a systems thinking perspective,
increased participation
provides the opportunity to break down barriers between patients and providers,
and citizens and policy makers.
with this one from my patchwork paraphrase (I’ve highlighted
the major similarity)
Swanson et al. (2012) argue that more participation from all
stakeholders can break down barriers between patients and providers.
In another sentence, I avoided using the original’s exact
wording. However, rather than rephrasing the idea in my own voice—as I should
do—I used synonyms of the original’s words. Compare this sentence from the
original
Health professionals will need to be able to set common goals and
targets with patients,
service users and relevant stakeholders, and ensure that each group or individual is
properly informed and engaged.
with this from my patchwork (I’ve also highlighted the
similarities here)
Healthcare providers need to set common goals for
patients, service users, and stakeholders (Swanson et al., 2012).
Instead of a paraphrase, I’ve only produced a knockoff of
the original, much like Mr. Pibb was made as a knockoff of Dr. Pepper. (You can
surmise which one is more scholarly based on the fact that Dr. Pibb
had his degree revoked.)
A Better Paraphrase
Let’s look instead at a true paraphrase of the original:
Original:
Health professionals will need to be able to set common goals and targets with patients, service users and relevant stakeholders, and ensure that each group or individual is properly informed and engaged. From a systems thinking perspective, increased participation provides the opportunity to break down barriers between patients and providers, and citizens and policy makers. Evidence and explicit knowledge need to be integrated with tacit knowledge of stakeholders within the working dynamic of the health team. (Swanson et al., 2012)
Health professionals will need to be able to set common goals and targets with patients, service users and relevant stakeholders, and ensure that each group or individual is properly informed and engaged. From a systems thinking perspective, increased participation provides the opportunity to break down barriers between patients and providers, and citizens and policy makers. Evidence and explicit knowledge need to be integrated with tacit knowledge of stakeholders within the working dynamic of the health team. (Swanson et al., 2012)
Paraphrase:
Swanson et al. (2012), in their application of systems thinking to health care, argued that providers, patients, and other stakeholders can use goal setting, increased participation, and the integration of tacit and explicit knowledge to create positive change in their healthcare settings.
Swanson et al. (2012), in their application of systems thinking to health care, argued that providers, patients, and other stakeholders can use goal setting, increased participation, and the integration of tacit and explicit knowledge to create positive change in their healthcare settings.
You’ll notice that, while I’ve used a few of the same words
as the original (which I’ve highlighted), I’ve used a different sentence
structure here. This paraphrase is also shorter than the patchwork, because
I’ve focused on the aspects of Swanson et al.’s ideas that matter for my
argument.
Your paraphrase of this passage would look different from
mine, which is good; it would represent your understanding, not mine. You
should strive for this individuality in your own paraphrasing, because this is why
people will want to read your writing rather than the sources you’re using: to
see your unique ideas.
Reference
Swanson, R. C.,
Cattaneo, A., Bradley, E., Chunharas, S., Atun, R., Abbas, K. M., … Best, A.
(2012). Rethinking health systems strengthening: Key systems thinking tools and
strategies for transformational change. Health
Policy and Planning, 27(Suppl. 4), 54–61. doi: 10.1093/heapol/czs090
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Matt Sharkey-Smith is a writing instructor and the coordinator of the graduate writing initiatives in the Walden Writing Center.
Matt Sharkey-Smith is a writing instructor and the coordinator of the graduate writing initiatives in the Walden Writing Center.
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WriteCast Episode 9: The Residency Experience: Reflections from Current Walden Students
This month on WriteCast, Nik interviews doctoral students at the Walden residency in Atlanta. Lam Cosmas (PhD in Management candidate), Gladys John (PhD in Human Services candidate), and Karim McDaniels (PhD in Management candidate) talk about their residency experiences, writing journeys, and writing advice for fellow students.
To download the episode to your computer, press the share button on the player above, then press the download button. Visit the Writing Center's WriteCast page for our episode archive and transcripts. Happy listening!
You might also like:
WriteCast Episode 7: Interview with Amy Kubista, EdD Student and Writing Center Staff Member
Student Spotlight: Jennifer Sulkowski
Student Spotlight: Mary Eldredge-Sandbo
Writing Instructors Nik Nadeau, Anne Shiell, and Brittany Kallman Arneson produce the WriteCast podcast.
Writing Together: How Peer Writing Communities Can Be Your Secret to Success
The Solitary Scholar
Writing can feel like a lonely exercise sometimes, and often when you’re alone with your keyboard it’s easy to forget about your audience. As you focus intently on the task at hand, it is also easy to forget that, as you write, you are one among many people adding their voices to a broader academic discussion.
Writing with a Group
Writing with your colleagues has a number of benefits:
- It lets you work together to solve problems when you face similar issues with your writing.
- It makes you stick to a schedule and keeps you accountable to other people.
- It helps you become a better reader and reviser of your own work.
- It shows you how other people approach the writing process.
- It gives you the chance to share what you know and what has worked for you.
- It keeps you connected and helps you understand how other readers see your work.
- It gets you used to sharing your own ideas and lets you learn from your colleagues as they share theirs.
You are Not Alone (for better or worse)
As you progress through your degree, you should remember you are learning to write for an increasingly larger audience. So, even if it feels like you are just alone with your keyboard writing to nobody sometimes, remember two very important things:
- Developing your academic voice and writing in a scholarly way is all because you are in training to produce work that other researchers will someday read;
- Also, perhaps more importantly, you have dozens, even hundreds of peers who are going through the same thing and training for the same goal, and you can learn a lot from one another.
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| Writing can be lonely--but it doesn't have to be. |
Building a Writing Community
There are a number of ways you can start a writing group, even if your colleagues are hundreds of miles away. If you are a doctoral student working on writing your proposal or final study, you can join the Walden Capstone Writing Community.
If you are not in a
doctoral program or you’re not quite at the proposal stage yet, keep track of
the people you meet in your courses and at residencies who are working on
similar topics, exchange contact information, and try to set up a time when you
can all get together either online or over the phone to share drafts, talk
about ideas, or work out problems you may have as you write. Helpful tips for
keeping the group going include
- Consistency—Make a commitment to meet regularly, and try not to skip meetings, even if no one has a draft to share. Don’t let yourself get out of the habit of checking in with each other.
- Collegiality—Writing groups thrive on honest and respectful exchanges between peers, so make sure you remain engaged with others’ work and offer useful feedback every time.
- Compatibility—Try to build a group with people with whom you know you will work well. This could mean you are all writing on similar topics, or it could mean that you all work in the same way or just like to write at the same times. Be aware of what works well for you and find other people with similar habits.
As a Walden student, you
may not have the luxury of a physical student lounge where you can hang out and
work with your peers, but that doesn’t mean you have to write alone. Be proactive and get creative. Staying connected through this process
will help you develop your own writing, and it will also give you the support
you need when the going gets tough.
Other posts you might like:
Who Needs a Writing Buddy? You Do!
Community: Your Secret Weapon
Lydia Lunning is one of Walden’s dissertation editors and the Coordinator for Capstone Resources in the Writing Center. Lydia also helps oversee the Walden Capstone Writing Community, a place where doctoral students working on their proposals and final studies can connect with their colleagues and get support through the capstone writing process.
From the Archives: Calling All International and Multilingual Students!
This week, we're re-sharing Kayla's popular post with tips and resources--including some updates--for international and multilingual students.
Every so often, we tutors (update: now called writing instructors) receive e-mails from students
expressing concerns about writing in English. “Some of my issues are related to
translation,” a student recently noted. “My first language is Spanish, so you
can imagine how difficult it is to write a paper in English.”
As someone with an embarrassingly limited knowledge of other languages, I certainly can imagine the challenge. There’s no way around it: scholarly writing is tough. The sophisticated vocabulary, tone, and structure needed to write clearly about complex ideas can prove arduous even if you’re writing in your first language. When you’re writing in a second (or third or fourth) language, the challenge is, of course, all the greater.
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However, the rewards of this struggle are also great. In my year
and some as a Walden writing tutor, I’ve read countless eye-opening papers from
international and multilingual students. I’ve learned about education in Japan,
healthcare in Nigeria, and business in Saint Martin. I’ve read accounts of identifying
with multiple cultures and triumphs in navigating in a new country. And I’ve
developed a profound respect for all the dedicated, hardworking multilingual
students whose perspectives and experiences enrich the scholarly dialogue at
Walden.
Free Resources for You
To help with the challenges of academic writing in English, the Writing Center offers great resources, 100% free of charge, to all Walden students:- A one-on-one paper review service for assistance with individual writing, conducted entirely via e-mail for your convenience no matter where in the world you’re located. You are free to submit your work wherever you are in the writing process; whether you send us an outline, a paragraph, a rough draft, or a complete paper, we’re happy to offer guidance and feedback.
- Update: A new page on our website specifically for multilingual students.
- A website full of tips on tricky grammar issues such as verb tense and subject-verb agreement.
- Exercises and quizzes to practice your skills.
- Live and recorded webinars on a wide variety of topics, including "What is Academic Writing?", which offers tips on scholarly tone and academic approaches.
- Grammarly, an automated tutoring and writing revision tool that provides immediate feedback on grammar and punctuation. Update: Check out Matt's advice on incorporating Grammarly into your writing process.
- Writing courses through the Academic Skills Center. One course to consider is Graduate Writing for Non-Native English Speakers, which reviews the grammar and writing skills necessary for success in your work here at Walden.
- Daily Buzzword or The Challenge to build vocabulary.
Finally, and most importantly, we’re always looking for ways to improve our resources. If you're a current international and/or multilingual Walden student, please take our brief survey to help us improve our services for you. The survey link will remain posted here as long as the survey is active. Thank you!
Writing Instructor and Coordinator of International Writing Instruction and Support Kayla Skarbakka earned her certificate in teaching English as a foreign language in Peru. She has also lived in Chile and Minnesota, and she currently resides in Texas.
Breaking Down the MEAL Plan: Wrapping Up With Lead Out Sentences
Over the past three weeks, Beth, Sarah, and Jen explained the first three parts of a MEAL plan* paragraph: a main idea, evidence, and analysis. This week we’re going to explore the fourth and
final letter of the MEAL plan acronym: L, for “lead out.”
Of all the components of the MEAL
plan, the lead out is the one I see writers struggle with most often. Maybe
it’s because the term “lead out” doesn’t paint as clear a picture in our minds
as do “main idea,” “evidence,” and “analysis.” Those three words show up often
in course readings and assignments; “lead out,” not so often. So what does it
mean to lead your reader out of the paragraph? In order to write an effective
lead out sentence, it’s important to know what it is, but also what it is not.
A lead out sentence is:
- The final sentence of the paragraph.
- A summary of the main point you want your reader to take away from your paragraph.
- A resting place for your reader to process what he or she has just read before moving on to new content in the next paragraph.
- A transition sentence.
Imagine your paper is a journey
you are taking with your reader. You are the guide, and you have the map; the
reader doesn’t know where you are going, but trusts you to lead expertly and to
thoughtfully consider how long each leg of the journey should be. Your job is to
anticipate the most logical resting points, and group your ideas together in
ways that will allow the reader to rest easily between them. These groupings
are your paragraphs. The space between each paragraph is a resting point, a
place for the reader to briefly process what he or she has just experienced on
the leg of the journey just completed: the previous paragraph.
So, what do you want your reader
to process while he or she rests up for the next leg? A succinct summary of the
main content of the preceding paragraph. If you transition before the resting
point, the reader may not be able to rest at all; instead, he or she has to
jump instantly into processing a new idea.
As an illustration, let’s look once again at our sample paragraph from the
first three blog posts. This time, though, I’ve changed the original lead out
sentence to a sentence that transitions to a new idea.
Many infant and mother deaths can be prevented, especially in the third world. Worldwide, around 11,000,000 children under 5 years old die primarily from preventable diseases, and over 500,000 mothers die from pregnancy- or delivery-related complications annually; almost 99% of these occur in developing countries (Hill et al., 2007). This high number is devastating because while infants in these countries have a high risk of dying, their risk does not stop once they are adults. For women, the lifetime risk of dying from pregnancy and childbirth-related causes is about 100 times higher in Bangladesh than in developed countries (WHO, 2004). The continued failures in implementing straightforward interventions targeting the root causes of mortalities have been responsible for these deaths (McCoy, 2006). The medical community has not been able to come up with simple, cost-effective, and life-saving methods that would help save lives in developing countries. In spite of these high mortality rates, women hold more political seats in Bangladesh than in nearly all other developing nations in the world.
Do you see how that last
sentence, while well-written, factual, and smoothly linked to the preceding
content, feels jarring at the bottom of that paragraph? If, as a writer, I
wanted to move from discussing infant and mother mortality rates in Bangladesh
to discussing Bangladeshi women in politics, I could certainly do so,
especially if my paper was a broader discussion of life for women in
Bangladesh. It would make much more sense, however, to make this transition at
the top of the next paragraph, after
the reader had rested and taken in the content in this paragraph about high
mortality rates. The transitioning sentence would instead become the main idea
(that “M” in the MEAL plan) of the next paragraph.
The original concluding sentence
of the example paragraph is a perfect example of a successful lead out. Let’s
check it against the criteria listed above.
This lack of innovation in the medical field has resulted in the continued unnecessary deaths of thousands of mothers and children.
√ Is it the final sentence of the
paragraph? Yes.
√ Does it summarize of the main
point of the paragraph? Yes. It does not repeat the main idea but instead helps
tie together all three MEAL components that precede it: main idea, evidence,
and analysis.
√ Does it help the reader rest
before moving on to the next paragraph? Yes. It gives readers content from the
previous paragraph to file away in their brain so that they are up to speed on
the paper’s argument and are ready to move on.
√ Does it wrap up the idea(s) in the paragraph rather than transitioning to a new idea?
Yes. It stays with the same ideas, leaving the transition for the beginning of
the next paragraph.
Using the MEAL plan can help you write paragraphs that are organized, developed, focused, and easy for readers to understand. Try the MEAL plan with your next piece of writing, and let us know how it goes in the comments!
*The MEAL plan is adapted from the Duke University Writing Studio.
Using the MEAL plan can help you write paragraphs that are organized, developed, focused, and easy for readers to understand. Try the MEAL plan with your next piece of writing, and let us know how it goes in the comments!
*The MEAL plan is adapted from the Duke University Writing Studio.
Brittany Kallman Arneson is a Writing Instructor and the Coordinator of Writing Center Residency Instruction and Design. Brittany also co-hosts WriteCast, the Writing Center's podcast.
Breaking Down the MEAL Plan: Adding Analysis
In the past couple weeks, Beth and Jen have outlined the importance of including a main idea sentence and credible evidence in each of your MEAL plan* paragraphs. This week we’re going to examine the third letter of this acronym: A, for “analysis.”
Effective paragraph-level analysis should explain your evidence for your
readers and clearly link each piece of evidence to your main idea. In other
words, analysis should function as both the “you” (your unique interpretation
of evidence) and the “glue” (a clear linkage among pieces of evidence and
between evidence and the topic sentence) in every paragraph. To ensure you have
analysis in your paragraph and that it serves the appropriate function, you
will want to ask yourself three key questions:
1. Do I interpret/explain each piece of evidence for my reader? Let’s say I
only included the following evidence in my paragraph:
Recently, in the state of Georgia, 18.5% of youth were categorized as being overweight, and 16.5% were categorized as being obese (CAHMI, 2011).
Without analysis, my readers could interpret this
statement in many ways. For instance, a reader from Louisiana, a state that has
much higher youth obesity rates, might interpret this evidence to mean that the
state of Georgia is doing pretty well regarding youth obesity. However, a
reader from Oregon, a state that has very low youth obesity rates, might read
this same statement very differently. My job as a writer is to tell my readers
what this evidence means or how it should be interpreted.
2. Do I clearly
link my ideas together? Often, writers might include strings of paraphrased
evidence, but they do not tell readers how these pieces of evidence are
connected. Highlighting the relationships between pieces of evidence is also an
important form of analysis. For instance, let’s add another sentence of
evidence to my previous sentence. Now, the evidence portion of my paragraph
reads as follows:
Recently, in the state of Georgia, 18.5% of youth were categorized as being overweight, and 16% were categorized as being obese (CAHMI, 2011). In 2007, 16% of youth were categorized as being overweight, and 21.3% were categorized as being obese (CAHMI, 2007).
Here, I have written out two pieces of evidence, but I
have not informed my readers of how this evidence is related or what this
evidence means within the context of my paragraph. In order to clarify my
meaning, I need to add some analysis to my second sentence:
Recently, in the state of Georgia, 18.5% of youth were categorized as being overweight, and 16% were categorized as being obese (CAHMI, 2011). Although still high, these numbers have decreased significantly from 2007—when 16% of the youth in the state were categorized as overweight and 21.3% were categorized as obese (CAHMI, 2007)—indicating that the state’s healthy eating campaign is having a positive result.
This revised second sentence clearly demonstrates a
relationship between the pieces of evidence and details why I’ve included the
evidence—to demonstrate the decrease in overweight and obesity rates as a
result of the state’s healthy eating campaign.
3. Are my ideas
clearly connected to my paragraph’s main idea? Your evidence must be linked
to or progress your main idea. You can ensure this connection or progression
through the use of solid analysis. For instance, let’s say my topic sentence
for the above evidence and analysis is as follows:
Healthy eating campaigns are one effective way to reduce rates of youth obesity in the state of Georgia.
My above analysis helps link back my evidence to this
very claim, progressing my argument and, hopefully, persuading my reader to
agree with my position.
So, now let’s ask these same questions of the sample
paragraph Beth introduced in her initial post:
Many infant and mother deaths can be prevented, especially in the third world. Worldwide, around 11,000,000 children under 5 years old die primarily from preventable diseases, and over 500,000 mothers die from pregnancy- or delivery-related complications annually; almost 99% of these occur in developing countries (Hill et al., 2007). This high number is devastating because while infants in these countries have a high risk of dying, their risk does not stop once they are adults. For women, the lifetime risk of dying from pregnancy and childbirth-related causes is about 100 times higher in Bangladesh than in developed countries (WHO, 2004). The continued failures in implementing straightforward interventions targeting the root causes of mortalities have been responsible for these deaths (McCoy, 2006). The medical community has not been able to come up with simple, cost-effective, and life-saving methods that would help save lives in developing countries. This lack of innovation in the medical field has resulted in the continued unnecessary deaths of thousands of mothers and children.
1. Do I
interpret/explain each piece of evidence for my reader? Yes! I provide a
clear statistic of infant and mother deaths, then I tell my reader how to
interpret this statistic: “This high number is devastating…”. Next, I demonstrate why it is devastating,
highlighting the medical community’s “continued failures in implementing
straightforward interventions…that would help save lives in developing
countries.” In this paragraph, words
like “devastating” and “unnecessary” also act as analysis, telling readers how
they should interpret the evidence I am providing.
2. Do I clearly
link my ideas together? Yes! By using transitional phrasing throughout my
paragraph, I am forcing readers to see connections between my ideas. For
instance, the phrase “This high number” that begins my third sentence relates
to the number of deaths I detail in the second sentence. Similarly, “This lack
of innovation” is an analytical phrase that ties my last sentence to the
details concerning the medical community’s failure to innovate to saves lives in
the previous sentence. Even transitions such as “likewise” or “however” can
draw out connections for your readers and serve as part of your analysis.
3. Are my ideas
clearly connected to my paragraph’s main idea? Yes! My main idea sentence
addresses the preventability of many mother and infant deaths in developing
countries. In this paragraph, my analysis highlights this claim as both serious
and devastating, blaming the international medical community for these deaths.
This analysis explains and progresses the argument I laid out in my initial
main idea sentence.
Although academic prose requires more than inserting
the “you” and “glue” into your writing, effective analysis plays the important
role of convincing readers of your interpretation of a topic or an argument
through well connected ideas and evidence.
*The MEAL plan is adapted from the Duke University Writing Studio.
*The MEAL plan is adapted from the Duke University Writing Studio.
For our final post in the series, go here next.
Dr. Sarah Prince is a writing instructor and coordinator of embedded writing support and design. Sarah's favorite thing about working with Walden students is helping them develop the confidence, clarity, and unique critical voice it takes to become effective and articulate scholarly writers.
The Writing Center Celebrates the Launch of myPASS
The new system includes several benefits that include the ability to
- search for open paper review appointments through a more organized, user-friendly interface;
- join a waiting list for open appointments;
- access the schedule via most mobile devices;
- attach your paper and provide review preferences within a single system;
- access past reviews;
- include or attach assignment instructions;
- articulate your place in the writing process and your goals for the review; and
- view bios of each writing instructor to gauge their specialties and interests.
While this new tool has so much more to offer, it does require that
students learn to navigate a different system. Change can be tough, so we have created some fantastic resources to
guide you. First, check out the Paper Reviews page
on our website to read about how to make appointments, attach a paper, sign up
for the waiting list, and so on. Next,
check out the video tutorials we created. You can put up
your feet and watch all of the video snippets at once, or you can click through
the playlist to find specific videos. Finally, register in myPASS and try it out for yourself! The link to the myPASS schedule is
conveniently located in your myWalden portal (Click on the Academics tab, look under Research
& Resources, click on the Schedule
an Appointment link, and under Writing
Center, click the myPASS
link). Be sure to visit the WritingCenter Policies
page as well. Because we have a new
schedule with new features, we have had to adjust some of our policies. One of our favorite policy changes is that with myPASS, you will be able to schedule
one appointment per week, see appointment openings, and have more than one
appointment scheduled at a time.
Well, that should do it. And of
course, we appreciate any and all feedback you can provide us with at writingsupport@waldenu.edu or here in the blog comments. We’d love to hear from you
as we continue to refine and improve our services. Happy writing!
Brian
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